I know we sound like a broken record
regarding submissions, but there are many things to consider before you press
that all important send button.
After you’ve read your manuscript one last
time to catch any little niggling mistakes, THEN run thorough spelling and
grammar program check. You’ll be stunned and chagrined at what you find. I’ve
experienced many a head-to-desk moment when I thought I’d fixed everything.
Please spell check. Please.
As you work through your manuscript, see if
you have any long and complex sentences. She
was taken at once by the beautiful and vast spread of the desert before her
with small dips and hollows, and was grateful she had taken some time studying
about the plants and animals that had lived in this area and thrived regardless
of the harsh weather conditions. How many times did you have to read this to figure out where
it was going? You don’t want to lose your reader in a quagmire of unnecessary
words.
Instead – maybe... She
marveled at the vast and beautiful desert spread before her. After learning
about the plants and animals that lived here, it still amazed her how they
thrived in these harsh conditions. This brings the sentences into a
pleasing cadence and simplifies it at the same time.
One trick to help detect
these long, stumbling-block sentences is to read your work aloud. I know you’ve
heard this before, and it can be embarrassing if you’re discovered reading to the
family pet, but it really works. If you can’t read it aloud without tripping
over the words, your reader will probably trip over them, too.
In your read-through,
you may notice words you’ve used way too many times – pet words. Be aware of
those as well. The Search and Replace tool is awesome for this job.
A necessary search-and-replace task will
include eradicating ‘felt’ ‘began to’ ‘about to’ and ‘started to’. As an example, ‘he felt like he was about to
hurl’ could simply read ‘he nearly hurled’. More punchy? Yep. ‘Felt’ isn’t a
very strong word – and there are so many replacements available. Try variations
of these words instead: sense, experience, suffer, undergo, think, believe,
consider, deem, suspect. There are many others as well.
How about ‘he began to walk to the store’?
It’s stronger as ‘he walked to the store’. Or ‘it began to pour buckets’ is
better as ‘it poured buckets’.
Another search-and-replace task should
include ‘was’ ‘that’ and ‘had’. Most incidences of ‘that’ can go away
completely, as long as the sentence still makes sense. The words ‘was’ and
‘had’ may be part of a Passive Voice sentence, which we discussed a few weeks
ago, and leads to weaker sentences and descriptions.
Sigh.
Yes, preparing a manuscript for submission
is a TON of hard work. Almost as hard as writing it. However, if you want your
readers captured by your story and eager for your next one, you have to take
care of the structure that supports it. And the hard work will be so
worthwhile.
Thanks for this Monica!
ReplyDeleteSpeaking as a writer, I know what it's like to want to submit, but I also know what it's like to submit to soon and then wish I had taken a bit longer.
You're spot on, too, about the hard work being worthwhile. I'm presently undergoing revision and will be doing it for about 2 months, about an hour a day. I'm loving it, because the story glows more and more with every session, and I get a chance to spend a suitable amount of time with every passage to make sure it's good to go before I hid send.
:)
Agonizing and rewarding!
DeleteI couldn't agree more about the hard work of editing your story to perfection before submitting it. I go through about five editing stages in my own writing, including full manuscript critiques from two people, then another pass from me. It can be agonizing work, cutting here, rephrasing there. But it's so worth it. Because I want my publisher to fall in love with the story, not worry about how much writing needs fixed.
ReplyDeleteI want them as enthusiastic as I am about my story.
I also know I won't catch everything. Fresh eyes are needed for that. I'm grateful to have good editors to help with that.
Fresh eyes are essential. I have several readers as well who help with this. Saves my sorry hiney!! :-)
DeleteMonica, your comments are very pertinent, but I advise caution on spell and grammar checks--the computer program often gets them wrong. I just caught "flare" passed by spellcheck, when the correct word is "flair."
ReplyDeleteSo true, Nikki!!! Fresh and grammatically experienced eyes are often necessary as well!
DeleteI think my all-time favorite is the mother-eaten robes that the spell-checker corrected. It gave one of my beta readers a good laugh. I put spell-check on to flag obvious thing but have learned to disable the autocorrect.
ReplyDeleteHere's a few possibilities for replacing 'felt': sense, experience, suffer, undergo, be aware of, think, believe, consider, deem, be of the opinion, suspect, recognized, knew, discerned, understood, appreciated, realized, grasped, comprehended, wondered if, detected, determined, perceived, noticed, observed, noticed, caught, heeded, wasn’t sure
ReplyDeleteSome of these possibilities may require a rewrite of the sentence, but that's not a bad thing.
DeleteUnfortunately Monica, you'll have people simply taking out the word 'felt' and substituting those words in its place. It is still passive writing. SHOW it, don't tell it. Quit the wondering and have your character be decisive. It makes for a stronger sentence.
ReplyDeleteEllen
And incidentally, people, to have your character 'notice' everything... that's a cop out. If you're in their POV, they are going to notice everything. SHOW SHOW SHOW.
DeleteI shall go back to erratas and ARC's now. (grins)
Ellen
It is this type of interesting thing with this post of yours. I had been interested with all the topic along with the flow in the story. Keep up to date the truly amazing work.
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