tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5417933958332866867.post259373006485685024..comments2024-02-13T05:45:21.290-05:00Comments on Champagne Book Group Blog: Word WeedingKat Hallhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17403674744943719495noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5417933958332866867.post-85225780910525171132013-08-07T21:51:47.558-04:002013-08-07T21:51:47.558-04:00That's a good one, Allison! When you get rid o...That's a good one, Allison! When you get rid of those big, bad weeds, then you turn to all the others and realize there's still lots to pluck - like glance.<br /><br />Here's an example:<br /><br />He gazed in at the newcomers. Every one of them wore a hood, and one had a sword strapped to her hip.<br />vs.<br />The newcomers wore hoods. One of them, a woman, was armed with a sword.<br /><br /><br />"Gazed" is often used to tell the reader that a character looked at or saw something. You can usually rewrite a sentence to describe what your character sees directly, since you have established your character's PoV.<br /><br />Hope this helps.<br /><br />:)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5417933958332866867.post-6094742593035998362013-08-07T20:51:31.849-04:002013-08-07T20:51:31.849-04:00And don't you love 'that'. However, th...And don't you love 'that'. However, the two words I'm always stumbling over are gazed and glanced. Not Look, but the above two.<br />Anyone come up with a way to gaze, without saying gaze, or glance, without the quick perusal? (they didn't peruse in the 13th century!) That's a modern word. See what I mean about 'that'!Allison Knighthttp://www.allisonknight.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5417933958332866867.post-34391532822433270862013-08-07T19:55:22.015-04:002013-08-07T19:55:22.015-04:00Words to live and die by! haha. Hard to realize ...Words to live and die by! haha. Hard to realize we have so many weeds in our word garden. Great topic Graeme!Monshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05221192490766144612noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5417933958332866867.post-6599409146915573772013-08-07T19:17:54.560-04:002013-08-07T19:17:54.560-04:00These are awesome tips for tightening a story and ...These are awesome tips for tightening a story and making it more active. Just reading the examples alone shows how much more we, as readers, are pulled into the story if the phrasing is right. "He steeled himself, ignoring fear." You've got my attention with a sentence like that. Laurie Templehttp://www.laurieryanauthor.comnoreply@blogger.com